Hmm one of my stanzas under influence of errr the finer things life has to offer....
Nebulous sprouts in a barren land,
Earth-worms plod to kiss the shining sun,
Petrichor rushes in
CLINK-CLINK-SHATTER-CLINK-CLINK
'Man is dream of the dolphin' the shaman spake,
Icarus was but a MAN.
Earth-worms plod to kiss the shining sun,
Petrichor rushes in
CLINK-CLINK-SHATTER-CLINK-CLINK
'Man is dream of the dolphin' the shaman spake,
Icarus was but a MAN.
4 comments:
Brilliant! Must confess though, I had to look up the meaning of petrichor. Had a vague idea, but wasn't sure!
nice to see u using the new words u learnin.. acha bacha:D
Now for me review... *rubbing hands in glee*
"Nebulous sprouts in a barren land" - ok.
"Earth-worms plod to kiss the shining sun," - rather a long way to plod, dontcha think? besides, that'd upset the universe's harmonies... or did u mean the sun's rays?
Petrichor rushes in - new word alert!!! pat pat pat...
CLINK-CLINK-SHATTER-CLIN-CLINK... and in walked the knight in shing armor, eh?
'Man is dream of the dolphin' the shaman spake - some (wo)men dream of scarecrows:D
Icarus was but a MAN. (nice. but...) mebbe he shoulda had a lil help from his pal Hermes? and why is man in caps? do i sense some insecurity regardin gender roles?
Arr...landluber.
ya' seem to hav aye good one her',tho' i think the sun should stan' for sun rays' arrr. rest is beuty, me impressed by ya' wurks.
(Sorry for tha speech - just saw ' Dead mans chest' so am kinda pretendin to b a pirate.)
and
'Man is a dream of the dolphin'
hmmm...donno abt that.
Anyway, So long and thanks for all the fish...
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